How is this poem? Any feedback will be appreciated.?

Above the Change



Months, years, and decades have worn their mood's shade

Seasons and people have changed as they start to fade

Cyclic motions of the ones above the difference of time

Those that try to relive the memories of their own prime



Refuse to forget staying Above the Change in more than name

Playing the game of their long gone fifteen minutes of fame

Again, and again this change racks the majority of the strays

The need to be recognized has never been stronger than today



Leaves Fall and flowers Spring between the Winter of tonight

The Summer heat of one whom is above the change gives delight

Never to fade as the people understand the passage of the year

Some turn into different spectors of their past selfs full of fear



Just remember this one thing, life is true but will never be forever

Birth, life, and death are changes in themselves that shall never sever

One great or bad day can alter life's mood just as history states

To be Above the Change and indifferent to it is to rise above the fates



*The nations can sometimes fall just like individual people

How is this poem? Any feedback will be appreciated.?
"It's too long! Poems do not have sentences! They are just a phrase or even just a word or two! Sorry, but i do not like it! "



I don't agree with "Blondie". This person obviously does not know how to critise a persons work and is not aware that great writers such as Homer wrote a whole allegy of work in poetry... over 500 pages long.



Anyway, I think its great. I encourage you to however pay attention to grammer. "Refuse to forget staying Above the Change in more than name" This sentence is a bit confusing and wordy you might want to change it around.



I love the powerful theme and the imagery you use in this poem. It's a very lifting poem and I absolutely love the last line. It's very clear, I didnt need a dictionary to read it lol



Over all, great job.. I'll be waiting to see more of your work
Reply:It's too long! Poems do not have sentences! They are just a phrase or even just a word or two! Sorry, but i do not like it!
Reply:is it me or it really makes you feel drowsy? I would recommend you to use different words (that I'm sure would work as good or even better in expressing the same message)

I like it, though, I really don't care if it is not catchy