Can I get somebody to review my essay?

I was glad that Texas Tech proposed we read such an exquisite novel. This story not only transcended me into a higher level of literary comprehension with its use of articulate and advanced vocabulary expressions, but also with its beautifully penned content, would shade some light that would accompany me in my personal hope into the unseen. An unseen destination where my aspirations could flower, a place where… well it is best stated in the University’s motto “From here, it’s possible” and in combination with my God I know anything from Texas Tech is possible. Ron Suskind’s account of Cedric Jennings’s journey could easily be mistaken for a fictional fairytale; a story written by a prolific author who illustrates a type of cliché-ish story. Nonetheless, once read in it’s entirety you find that this real account that can truly alter one’s mind state. The book often lets’ the reader into an intimate glimpse not only of the life of the main character but all who surround him, allowing

Can I get somebody to review my essay?
Is this your essay? I do have a few suggestions, if it is -



I was glad that Texas Tech proposed we read such an exquisite novel (as what?). This story not only (try ‘elevated’) me into a higher level of literary comprehension with its use of articulate and advanced vocabulary expressions, but also with its beautifully (try 'composed') content, [would shade some light that would accompany me in my personal (journey?) into the unseen] (? Did you mean ‘shed’ instead of ‘shade’? This phrase does not make sense nor does it fit well here. Try revising it). (What is an unseen destination?) [An unseen destination where my aspirations could flower, a place where… well it is best stated in the University’s motto “From here, it’s possible” and in combination with my God I know anything from Texas Tech is possible] (Re-think this sentence and structure). Ron Suskind’s account of Cedric Jennings’s journey could easily be mistaken for a fictional fairytale; a story written by a prolific author who illustrates a type of cliché-ish story. Nonetheless, once read in it’s entirety you find that this real account that can truly alter one’s mind state. The book often lets’ the reader into an intimate glimpse not only of the life of the main character but all who surround him, allowing (? Remaining sentence cut off?) (Try restructuring last sentence, for example: The book often allows the reader, not only into an intimate glimpse of the life of the main character, but also into the lives of those around him…)



I don't know if this is what you were looking for when you asked for a review... but this is what I see in this writing. I hope it helps.
Reply:if this is your essay i would say that you are overdoing it a bit. are you trying to make the reader think you are real smart. / what it tells me is you are going to be a real good kissbutt and yesman.
Reply:ummm this is your essay. it is really good, but it is pretty short. If this isn't all of it copy and paste it from microsoft word and you can put all of it on here, but don't press space after pasting it, b/c then it will only get so much. but other than that it was a very good essay. i didn't find anything wrong with spelling, the essay itself though kind of makes me think you are trying to impress Texas Tech...